The content of the letter is relevant to the task. The first two bullet points are covered in detail, with

several ‘problems’ given; the third bullet point could be more fully illustrated, with details of what kind of

accommodation (not just a single room). The information in the letter is logically organised and the

appropriate use of linking devices means that it reads quite fluently. Vocabulary is used well, spelling is

evidence of more complex sentence structures but also some grammatical errors, although these do not

affect the reader greatly.

helpful in terms of grouping ideas around a central topic. Nevertheless, the writer’s view is apparent

and there is a logical flow to the points given. Although there is some appropriate vocabulary, there

are a lot of errors throughout. There are some complex structures used but, overall, sentence control

is very weak and this makes some parts, such as the conclusion, very hard to follow.

Note: the corrections made by the test taker in this hand-written response make it difficult to read. It is

better to cross out an error and rewrite the word so that the final response is clear.

describes a large shopping centre but does not tell us why shopping is popular. The second paragraph

presents the effect on individuals, but not on society as a whole. We can see that the writer thinks

there are negative effects but the main ideas presented do not relate directly to this question. The

relationship between ideas can be followed but there is a lack of progression in relation to the question.

The main parts of the task are addressed, although the first part (Why is shopping so popular?) is

presented more fully than the second (the effects). Ideas are relevant but there is a lack of clarity which

prevents a higher band score. Nevertheless, there is a clear overall progression in the response

because ideas are logically organised. A range of markers is used effectively to link ideas, although

there are errors in the use of some basic connectives.

The test taker attempts to use a range of vocabulary and introduces some less common expressions,

although with mixed success. Some expressions remain unclear, while others are used repetitively.

This is a very strong response which directly answers the question. Each part of the task is explored in

depth, ideas are set out clearly and well-developed. There is a clear progression throughout the

response and lapses in coherence and cohesion are minimal. The personal comment in the final

paragraph means that the ending does not relate directly to the question, but this is considered a minor

lapse.

A wide range of vocabulary is used with flexibility and precision throughout the response and errors are

very rare. The occasional minor errors or omissions in structures do not detract from the wide range,